The Apocalypse named Emmanuel Rodrick

A ma fac il y a un journal anglais (l'anglophone) et on peut envoyer des articles, de courtes histoires, des nouvelles, en anglais et on peut se faire publier... Je suis entrain de réécrire une vielle petite histoire que j'avais faite en anglais (je corrige les fautes et les phrases chaotiques) j'aimerais votre avis et vos corrections si vous êtes fort en anglais... Pour ceux qui ne le lisent pas je vais mettre la traduction.

The Apocalypse named Emanuel Rodrick.
The hole part of bad things that happen in the world was, at the begin, a good idea for everyone. But the better can lead the worst.
Emmanuel Rodrick was a scientist, a weel-respected man in his familly and for his friends. He was father of two cute little girls. The 16th December 2018, fiew days before christmast, Emmanuel done an extraordinary discover !
Stem cells could regenerate all things in a body, ALL ! After fiew test he was abble to restructurate a brain of a rat !
This chrismast was the most wonderful in the word... And one of the last in the history of human...
Stem cells was using in everything. A broken leg ? If you don’t want to be fragile for the futur : stem cells ! If you lost your eye in an accident : stem cells ! If you are third-degree burned on 90% of the body, no problem ! Stem cells !
After ten years every one was constituated of stem cells... Parents was abble to “configurate” all characteristics of their baby thank’s to Emmanuel Rodrick.
The 3rd March 2028 Jhon Stove died of a bloody car accident. Stem cells was a miracle but for some people no-God could save them... With his body cut un two and casings pureed, even the holly Rodrick couldn’t do anything for him. So he was send to Lewis and Clarck’s morgue. While his corpse was lying on the table, his right-arm began to move, and the second. When the coroner entered the room, he missed vanishing in front of an alf-Mr.Stove. He was slipped on the floor whit help of his hands... The rest of his body on the table. This man with just the top of his bust made the coroner vomit.
After anylises we discovered that stem cells was regenerated themselves after the death of all cells of the body, even the heart... That actually didn’t beat anymore... The brain of Mr.Stove was acting but just for primary things : eating.

Yumi a écrit:

The Apocalypse named Emmanuel Rodrick.
The whole (?) part of bad things that happen in the world was, at the begin, a good idea for everyone. But the better can lead the worst.
Emmanuel Rodrick was a scientist, a well-respected man in his familly and by (?) his friends. He was the father of two cute little girls. [Suppression, date seule sans article dans ce cas là] 16th December 2018, few days before Christmas, Emmanuel did an extraordinary discovery (franchement pas sur que ça marche avec "do", cette affaire là) !
Stem cells could regenerate every part of a body / pieces of body! After few tests (pas certain) he was able to restructurate the brain of a rat !
This Christmas was the most wonderful in the word... And one of the last in the human's history...
Stem cells could be used for everything. A broken leg ? If you don’t want to be fragile for the future ("for" ne me semble pas très correct, mais je sais pas quoi mettre à la place) : stem cells ! If you did lost your eye in an accident : stem cells ! If you are third-degree burned on 90% of the body (un peu lourdingue), no problem ! Stem cells !
After ten years, everyone was constituated (ça existe pas, ça : made of ?) of stem cells... Parents were able to “configurate” all characteristics of their baby thank to (pas certain) Emmanuel Rodrick.
3rd March 2028 John Stove died of a bloody car accident. Stem cells were a miracle, but for some people no-God could save them... With his body cut un two and casings pureed (rien compris à ça, donc je sais pas si c'est correct ^^), even the holy Rodrick couldn’t do a thing for him. So he was sent to Lewis and Clarck’s morgue. While his corpse was lying on the table, his right arm began to move, then the second (did too ? sans verbe, ça fait bizarre). When the coroner entered the room, he missed vanishing in front of an half-Mr. Stove. He was slipped (pas sûr que ça marche avec ce verbe-ci) on the floor with help of his hands... The rest of his body was still lying on the table. This man with just the top of his bust (houla, à changer) made the coroner vomite (je crois, ou utilise puke, ça fait moins traduction littérale).
After analyses we discovered that stem cells were able to regenerate themselves after the death of all cells of the body (maladroit), even the heart... That actually didn’t beat anymore (négation + anymore = caca ^^ => no longer does matter)... The brain of Mr.Stove was acting (effective, efficient ?) but the only purpose aimed was quite a primar one : eating.

Je dois en laisser passer pas mal, les constructions de phrase sont assez bancales par moment, ça sent assez la traduction littérale dans certains passages. Je laisse des anglophones plus confirmés poursuivre.

C'est horrible de constater que 90% de mes erreurs sont des fautes d'inattentions... Argl

"did lost" ? Lost tout seul = Loose + simple past non ?

"Rodrick couldn’t do a thing for him." là par contre je suis sure qu'on peut dire "anything for him" = ne pouvais rien faire pour lui, non ?

J'ai oublié ma grammaire toussa, mais il me semble que dans une proposition *oublié-le-nom machin qui commence par IF, en gros*, on est un peu obligés de mettre un auxiliaire. Je n'en suis pas sûr au point de te citer un livre de grammaire anglais, mais c'est mon spider-sense qui me le dit ^^

Pour le truc avec "anything", ça marche peut-être effectivement aussi. J'ai juste eu une prof particulièrement maniaque qui refusait qu'on emploie les any-machins, parce que ça faisait anglais traduit littéralement, et qu'il y a des manières plus élégantes et littéraires de dire ces trucs-là.
Bon après, je n'ai pas à te faire subir mes traumatismes passés avec ma prof d'anglais qui mettait des bottes de cosmonaute blanc fluo et qui avait un sourire lifté à faire peur comme le chat du Cheschire.

Je te fais confiance avec tout ce que tu as pu corriger comme ça^^ (j'ai honte "fiew", "hole", "able"...) Et dire que je suis en licence d'anglais^^

Espérons que je sois moins distraite que là... En tout cas merci (pour l'instant), je vais corriger tout ça et me mettre à la suite.

C'est... assez truffé de fautes. Niveau orthographe mais surtout formulation. Ca rend la lecture assez difficile...